Senior Project help!!

[sperry]

Originally Posted by moose

Bump!

Does anybody have any book stuff about Legacys? Techinical books would be good too.
Also, anybody have anything on the SVX? They have to be something besides internet.
Thanks,
Mike

I've got the original '94 SVX sales brochure around here somewhere... I think.

[moose]

Originally Posted by sperry

I've got the original '94 SVX sales brochure around here somewhere... I think.

I could definitely use that.

[100_Percent_Juice]

Are you using all this literature to make a paper mache subaru?

[moose]

Yes

[van]

Don't fuck up my books with plaster or whatever the heck you make paper mache out of.

[Dean]

Originally Posted by van

Don't fuck up my books with plaster or whatever the heck you make paper mache out of.

Back to kindergarten with you...

Water
Flour
Paper
(You can use other stuff, or cook it, but thems the basics.)

[van]

Originally Posted by Dean

Back to kindergarten with you...

Sweet!

[sperry]

Originally Posted by moose

I could definitely use that.

You coming to the meet this week?

[moose]

Yes I am.

[sperry]

Originally Posted by moose

Yes I am.

I'll toss the brochure in the car so if I make it to the meet it's yours!

[moose]

Originally Posted by sperry

I'll toss the brochure in the car so if I make it to the meet it's yours!

Sweet. Thanks

[Libila]

What are you doing for a final product? Or do you not have to do that anymore for the SP?

[moose]

Originally Posted by Libila

What are you doing for a final product? Or do you not have to do that anymore for the SP?

I am not sure what my final product is going to be. It is most likely going to be a video probably.

[Libila]

Originally Posted by moose

I am not sure what my final product is going to be. It is most likely going to be a video probably.

Do you have equipment and the know how to make a video? The reason I ask is the final product really needs to shine for you to do well. I like to write and take photographs, so I made a car magazine for my senior project. Listen to your teachers, especially when they tell you to do something you're passionate about.

[moose]

I have the video editing software. I have a decent camera to take video. I make sure I take advice from my teacher.

[Libila]

Originally Posted by moose

I have the video editing software. I have a decent camera to take video. I make sure I take advice from my teacher.

Sounds like you're off to a good start. Good luck!

[rubberbiscuitt]

This might be a long shot, but if you want some real hands on comparison to how the Impreza has evolved in 10+ years I might be able to help. Currently at my shop I have my 1993 Impreza L stripped and ready for cage, and a 2002 Impreza wrx, also stripped and ready for a cage(to be finished by 3/2) Side by side you can really point out the differences and with some mechanical knowledge you can really tell why/how the newer car is better and Subaru evolves in a forward direction. Let me know if this can help.

[moose]

^That would be totally awesome. Would it be possible for mor to take pictures?

[rubberbiscuitt]

yeah. better hurry. most of bugeye cage will be finished this week.



bugeye L.... lol... no it's too wide.

[Dean]

Originally Posted by rubberbiscuitt

yeah. better hurry. most of bugeye cage will be finished this week.

bugeye L.... lol... no it's too wide.

Please share pictures of the cages you build and any commentary you might have on them. Some of us will likely be doing cages at some point and would love to see them and understand the design trade offs, etc...

[moose]

Originally Posted by rubberbiscuitt

yeah. better hurry. most of bugeye cage will be finished this week.

i will try. It all depends on the weather.

[moose]

Here it is. The essay. In all honesty, I think it is crap. I had to bullshit my way through it. Tell me what you think.

[100_Percent_Juice]

I was looking for the pizazz and wow. You need to add both of those things and you will increase your grade.

[van]

Needs more pictures

[sperry]

Originally Posted by moose

Here it is. The essay. In all honesty, I think it is crap. I had to bullshit my way through it. Tell me what you think.

You want any nitpicking?

- Your intro paragraph should act almost like a table of contents about what the rest of the paper is about, instead of just jumping in and talking about Subaru, mention that Subaru is a household namecar manufacturer but it took many years and many models for it to become so well known. Tell the reader that the paper's point is to examine the changes in Subaru's models over the years and show how those changes made their product better and better to the point that they became a well known auto manufacturer. Don't make the reader figure out what the paper's about, you can tell them explicitly.
- household is one word
- ladybug is one word
- horsepower is one word
- turbocharge is one word
- you shouldn't use acronyms without first defining them (AWD, JDM, USDM, WRC, LSD...)
- I wouldn't abbreviate AWD as "a.w.d.", I think the all caps version is acceptable, or even just writing out "all wheel drive"
- you shouldn't use "92" when you mean 1992, same with "06" and "07" later on
- typo in "bum,per" on page 4, as well as redundant use of the word "bumper"
- typo "WWRX" on page 6
- you might want to define STi?
- "It produce 240hp and..." should be "produced"
- Mazdaspeed is one word

In general: you've got a ton of technical data, which is a bit dry to read, but does show you've done your research. The paper would really benefit from explaining *why* that technical data means the car got better, and why the better car helped Subaru's popularity. Why is a 2.2l motor "better" than a 1.8l motor? Why did the upgraded looks of the 2.5RS over the base Impreza suddenly make Subaru more popular? (hint, it finally meant there was a rally-look car sold in the US). Why did consumers appreciate the changes Subaru made to the models. If the premise of the paper is to show how the evolution of Subaru's lineup has made Subaru more popular, you need to show not just the progression of the car models, you also need to show how the new models sold better and helped Subaru's reputation.

In that light, you could also dial back much of the tech info and talk more about stuff like rally wins helping sales, and increased sales numbers as the models evolved, and public perception of the brand. For example, you could show Subaru's growing popularity by talking about all the Subaru car clubs that sprang up after the WRX came here, or how the perception of Subaru evolved from "cheap cars" to "indestructible cars" to "performance cars". Maybe even throw in Subaru's various slogans over the years to show the change in image they were making.

And with all that additional stuff, you could break the paper up not by each individual model, but by era... sort the paper by Subaru's popularity, rather than by the cars they made, since the point is to show the history of Subaru, not the history of the Impreza.

Finally, your closing paragraph should reiterate what the paper was about. Remind people that the evolution of the model lineup matched the evolution of Subaru's image, and that Subaru went from a niche manufacturer of economy cars to a World Rally Champion manufacturer to a household name. Maybe even throw in something sappy about how closely connected "the Subaru that might be in your own garage" is to that original 360 that started it all to close the circle on the topic.